考研英語復(fù)習(xí)資料考研英語作文范文的批改12

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　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear HR Manager,

　　I have found your job advertisements on the website JobSeeker.Com yestoday.It is attracted me want to apply Excecutive Assistant of your campany.

　　With five years working experience in an national factory,which make me have a strength ability of commuication and team corperation.Now I have finished continuing education of MBA,which enlight me to build a new career.In order to put my knowledge into practice,I would like to work for a well-managed and successful campany just like yours.

　　If I can be admitted by your campany, I will assist CEO do some useful management and help him deal with difficult documents.I m really eager to work for your comany and work with colleagues.

　　My resume will send to you by post letter tomorrow.Looking forward to your recent reply and thank you for reading my letter.

　　------------------------------------------------------------- Yours,Sincerely

　　-------------------------------------------------------------- Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點(diǎn)評如下：

　　Dear HR Manager,I have found(用過去時(shí)就可以了，沒有用完成時(shí)的語境) your job advertisements on the website JobSeeker.Com yestoday(這里是什么意思?). It is attracted me(加不定式to) want to apply Excecutive(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，executive) Assistant of your campany(拼寫錯(cuò)誤company). 【W(wǎng)ith five years(five-year或者是five years) working experience in an(應(yīng)該用a) national factory, which make me have a strength ability of commuication(拼寫錯(cuò)誤) and team corperation(拼寫錯(cuò)誤).前半句是一個(gè)介詞短語，后半句是定語從句，這句話的結(jié)構(gòu)是不正確的，把with 和，which去掉，把make改成makes】 Now I have finished continuing education of MBA, which enlight(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，應(yīng)該用三單形式enlightens) me to build a new career. In order to put my knowledge into practice, I would like to work for a well-managed and successful campany(拼寫錯(cuò)誤company) just like yours. If I can be admitted by your campany(拼寫錯(cuò)誤company), I will assist CEO do some useful management and help him deal with difficult documents. I m really eager to work for your comany(拼寫錯(cuò)誤company) and work with colleagues. My resume will send to you by post letter tomorrow. Looking forward to your recent reply and thank you for reading my letter.------------------------------------------------------------- Yours,Sincerely(s小寫)-------------------------------------------------------------- Li Ming 點(diǎn)評：4-5分語法錯(cuò)誤有點(diǎn)多，尤其是第一段開頭就出現(xiàn)了幾處語法錯(cuò)誤，最后兩段簡練一些并成一段。I will assist CEO do some useful management and help him deal with difficult documents這句話可以去掉，因?yàn)檫@正式這個(gè)職位需要做的。