鄭州市 2024高考英語短文改錯、書面表達一輪訓練（3）附參考范文
鄭州市 2024高考英語短文改錯、書面表達一輪訓練（3）附參考范文
(201*·石家莊質檢)
I am a very active girl in my class. I have many hobby，1.__ ______
such as writing stories, playing piano and singing English2.________
songs. My most favorite subject is English.
I became3.________
interested in it when I was very young. My dream is 4.________
to study abroad. But now I need to improve my English5.________
and learn more about west culture as well. I will be6.________
able to improving the friendship between China and7.________
the rest of the world. I hoped my dream will come true.8.________
And I believe in nobody can change my mind. I will work9.____ ____
harder and follow my heart, no matter how happens！10.________
答案與解析：
1．hobby→hobbies many后接復數名詞，下文such as后列舉的內容也是提示。
2．piano前加the play the piano表示“彈鋼琴”，是固定搭配。西洋樂器類名詞前常用定冠詞the。
3．去掉most favorite本身就是“最喜愛的”，因此原句語義重復。
4．√
5．But→So 前后邏輯上是因果而不是轉折關系。
6．west→western 依據語境這里表示“西方文化”，應用形容詞western作定語。
7．improving→improve be able to do sth.表示“能夠做某事”。
8．hoped→hope 這里表示說話人現在的愿望，故應用一般現在時。
9．去掉in I believe that..我相信……。believe in表示“信任，信仰”，其后不能接從句。
10．how→what no matter what happens無論發生什么，what充當從句的主語。
*************************************************************結束
請根據下表內容寫一篇介紹劉國正的英語短文。
注意：1．詞數：120左右；
2．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
姓名 出生地 出生時間 身高 體重 職業
劉國正 湖北武漢 1980年 1．66m 63kg 乒乓球運動員
經歷、成
就、特點 1．六歲開始打球；
2．1995年進入國家隊；
3．訓練刻苦；
4．曾多次榮獲國家及國際大賽冠軍；5．特點：敢打敢拼；心理素質好，大賽發揮出色。
現況 2024年1月3日正式成為國乒男二隊主教練 ________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
參考范文：
Liu Guozheng，a super table tennis star，was born in Wuhan，Hubei Province in 1980.He is 1．66 meters tall and weighs 63 kilograms.
When he was six，he began to play table tennis.In 1995，he was chosen to the National Team.He trained hard and was strict with himself.Since then，he has won several championships in the national and international matches.Daring to struggle in the match and having fine quality are his strengths，so he performs well in the matches.Since January 3rd,2024，he has acted officially as coach of No.2 National Table Tennis Male Team.
We're sure that our national table tennis will make greater achievements under his guidance.
*****************************************************結束
第***套
短文改錯（共10小題；每小題1分，滿分10分）
此題要求改正所給短文中的錯誤。對標有題號的每一行做出判斷：如有錯誤（每行只有一個錯誤），則按下列情況改正：
此行多一個詞：把多余的詞用斜線（＼）劃掉，在該行右邊橫線上寫出該詞，并也用斜線劃掉。
此行缺一個詞：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（八），在該行右邊橫線上寫出該加的詞。
此行錯一個詞：在錯的詞下劃一橫線，在該行右邊橫線上寫出改正后的詞。
注意：每行都有一個錯誤。
I was a honest child indeed．I didn’t dare to tell lies 76．
because of my eyes often let the secret out ．I remembered 77．
telling a lie to my parents, and I could hard fix my eyes on 78．
my father’s face, let alone my mother eyes．I glanced 79．
here and there, up or down, nervously． 80．
However, after I came to Beijing, I no longer have to
81．
worry my eyes because everything I wanted to say 82．
was sent by letter．I found myself often tell small lies．I
83．
wrote, “I’m
in Beijing．I enjoy the food selling at the
84．
university．And at the weekends, I often buy fried chickens 85．
or pork to eat．”
短改: 76．a改為an
77．刪去of
78．hard 改為hardly
79．mother 改為mother’s
80．or改為and 81．have改為had
82．my前加about 83．tell改為telling
84．selling改為sold
85．chickens改為chicken
******************************************************結束
仔細觀察下面圖畫，請你給China Daily寫一篇100字左右的短文，描述一下你在路上所見的事，并就騎車人--李平的行為，簡單闡明自己的感想。
參考范文
One Possible Version
One day Li Ping was riding fast when she suddenly saw an old woman before her. But it was too late to stop immediately. The old woman was knocked down. Li Pin didn't help her. Instead, she scolded her and rode away.
When Li Ping stopped her bicycle, she was surprised to find her new shoes missing. She hurried back and found the old woman there holding her shoes in her hands. She was sorry for what she had done and apologized to the woman.
From this, I learned everybody should be kind to each other. Never do as Li Pin did to the old, or you will feel greatly sorry.
**************************************************結束
4.假設你是李華，你的美國朋友Tom上個月來到北京學習。七月份你將去北京參加暑期中學生英語演講比賽，你在資料搜集、語言運用等方面遇到了困難。請根據以下要點給Tom寫一封電子郵件：
1.詢問Tom的生活和學習情況；
2.談談你的困難并請Tom幫忙；
3.告訴Tom你打算賽后去看他。
注意：1.詞數：120-150
2.可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
【參考范文】
4.Dear Tom,
How time flies! It has been a month since you came to Beijing. How is everything going on with your life and study now?
What excited me most is that I will go to Beijing to attend an English speech contest to be held in summer holiday in July for middle school students. But unfortunately, I’m encountering many difficulties in collecting materials needed and I also have problems in the application of the language. I wonder if you can help me with these difficulties. I really appreciate it if you could help me.
Here is good news for you. I’ve decided to go to see you after the English speech contest. I am looking forward to seeing you.
Best wishes to you and your parents!
Yours,
Li Hua
**********************************************************結束
8.下面圖表是對我省某校高三學生選擇高考志愿時所考慮因素的調查結果。請用英語寫一篇簡要的報告，并說說你自己的觀點。
注意：（1）文章的開頭已經寫好。
（2）詞數10左右。
（3）可以適當發揮。London and it 2______
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school 3____
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.4___ ___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you 5___
are particular interested in human rights.So I will 6____
see that there is anything on their website 7____
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport 8____
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he 9___
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look 10___
forward to seeing you again.
【參考答案】KEY 6
Dear Anish,
Here are the information about Manchester University.___is___
It is about 200 miles far away from London and it ___far___
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school__right__
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.___courses___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you __it__
are particular interested in human rights.So I will ___particularly__
see that there is anything on their website ___if/whether__
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport _to___
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he __arrive_
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look __and_
forward to seeing you again.
******************************************************結束
************************************************結束
謀篇的原則：
滿分作文都有個共性就是有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。文章的連貫性和緊湊感是很重要的。句子作為最小的表達意思的語言當位如果只是被隨意的整合，是無法達到有效表達的目的。
常見的句子之間的連接手段有： 使用代詞指代上一句中的名詞 重復使用上一句中的詞 使用連接詞 使用平行結構 高考大綱中常用的連接詞:
表并列補充關系的: what is more, besides, also, as well, moreover, furthermore, in addition, 表轉折對比關系的: but, however, yet, instead, on the other hand, on the contrary, although, different from, in contrast to, despite, in spite of, whereas, unlike, nevertheless, not only…but also, here…there, years ago…today, this…that, the former…the latter, then…now, the first…whereas the second, once…now, on the one hand…on the other hand, some…others, 表因果關系的: since, as, because (of), for, so, thus, therefore, as a result, so that, 表條件關系的: if, on the condition (that), as long as, unless, or else, 表時間關系的: when, after, before, until, as soon as, later, afterwards, soon, lately, recently, since, from then on, eventually, in the meantime, then, suddenly, at the same time, next, early this morning/year/century, after an interval, now, after, presently, later, afterward, somewhat later, finally, at last, all of a sudden, 表特定的順序關系: above all, first of all, firstly, first, secondly, the , next, finally, in the end, at last, 表換一種方式表達: in other words, that is to say, to put it another way, 表進行舉例說明: for instance, for example, like, such as, 表陳述事實: in fact, actually, as a matter of fact, to tell you the truth 表總結: on the whole, in short, all in all, general, in a word, in conclusion, in closing, in summary.
***********************************************************結束
【參考范文】
8.
Some senior middle school graduates have different opinions on how to choose their majors and universities.
About 35% of the students insist that the choice should be based on their own interest. They say interest is the way leading to success. They think it is a miserable thing to be forced to study what they have no interest in.
The percentage of the students who consider it is the need of the society that matters a lot, is 45%.They say think it will help them find the job they like best. In addition, interest can be developed and changed.
Interestingly, there are about 20% of the students who find it so difficult to make a choice that they prefer to follow the advice offered by their parents or teachers.
In my opinion, interest is the most important of all. Without interest you can’t study the subject very well and may have more difficulty with your career.
********************************************************結束
鄭州市 2024高考英語短文改錯、書面表達一輪訓練（3）附參考范文
(201*·石家莊質檢)
I am a very active girl in my class. I have many hobby，1.__ ______
such as writing stories, playing piano and singing English2.________
songs. My most favorite subject is English.
I became3.________
interested in it when I was very young. My dream is 4.________
to study abroad. But now I need to improve my English5.________
and learn more about west culture as well. I will be6.________
able to improving the friendship between China and7.________
the rest of the world. I hoped my dream will come true.8.________
And I believe in nobody can change my mind. I will work9.____ ____
harder and follow my heart, no matter how happens！10.________
答案與解析：
1．hobby→hobbies many后接復數名詞，下文such as后列舉的內容也是提示。
2．piano前加the play the piano表示“彈鋼琴”，是固定搭配。西洋樂器類名詞前常用定冠詞the。
3．去掉most favorite本身就是“最喜愛的”，因此原句語義重復。
4．√
5．But→So 前后邏輯上是因果而不是轉折關系。
6．west→western 依據語境這里表示“西方文化”，應用形容詞western作定語。
7．improving→improve be able to do sth.表示“能夠做某事”。
8．hoped→hope 這里表示說話人現在的愿望，故應用一般現在時。
9．去掉in I believe that..我相信……。believe in表示“信任，信仰”，其后不能接從句。
10．how→what no matter what happens無論發生什么，what充當從句的主語。
*************************************************************結束
請根據下表內容寫一篇介紹劉國正的英語短文。
注意：1．詞數：120左右；
2．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
姓名 出生地 出生時間 身高 體重 職業
劉國正 湖北武漢 1980年 1．66m 63kg 乒乓球運動員
經歷、成
就、特點 1．六歲開始打球；
2．1995年進入國家隊；
3．訓練刻苦；
4．曾多次榮獲國家及國際大賽冠軍；5．特點：敢打敢拼；心理素質好，大賽發揮出色。
現況 2024年1月3日正式成為國乒男二隊主教練 ________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
參考范文：
Liu Guozheng，a super table tennis star，was born in Wuhan，Hubei Province in 1980.He is 1．66 meters tall and weighs 63 kilograms.
When he was six，he began to play table tennis.In 1995，he was chosen to the National Team.He trained hard and was strict with himself.Since then，he has won several championships in the national and international matches.Daring to struggle in the match and having fine quality are his strengths，so he performs well in the matches.Since January 3rd,2024，he has acted officially as coach of No.2 National Table Tennis Male Team.
We're sure that our national table tennis will make greater achievements under his guidance.
*****************************************************結束
第***套
短文改錯（共10小題；每小題1分，滿分10分）
此題要求改正所給短文中的錯誤。對標有題號的每一行做出判斷：如有錯誤（每行只有一個錯誤），則按下列情況改正：
此行多一個詞：把多余的詞用斜線（＼）劃掉，在該行右邊橫線上寫出該詞，并也用斜線劃掉。
此行缺一個詞：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（八），在該行右邊橫線上寫出該加的詞。
此行錯一個詞：在錯的詞下劃一橫線，在該行右邊橫線上寫出改正后的詞。
注意：每行都有一個錯誤。
I was a honest child indeed．I didn’t dare to tell lies 76．
because of my eyes often let the secret out ．I remembered 77．
telling a lie to my parents, and I could hard fix my eyes on 78．
my father’s face, let alone my mother eyes．I glanced 79．
here and there, up or down, nervously． 80．
However, after I came to Beijing, I no longer have to
81．
worry my eyes because everything I wanted to say 82．
was sent by letter．I found myself often tell small lies．I
83．
wrote, “I’m
in Beijing．I enjoy the food selling at the
84．
university．And at the weekends, I often buy fried chickens 85．
or pork to eat．”
短改: 76．a改為an
77．刪去of
78．hard 改為hardly
79．mother 改為mother’s
80．or改為and 81．have改為had
82．my前加about 83．tell改為telling
84．selling改為sold
85．chickens改為chicken
******************************************************結束
仔細觀察下面圖畫，請你給China Daily寫一篇100字左右的短文，描述一下你在路上所見的事，并就騎車人--李平的行為，簡單闡明自己的感想。
參考范文
One Possible Version
One day Li Ping was riding fast when she suddenly saw an old woman before her. But it was too late to stop immediately. The old woman was knocked down. Li Pin didn't help her. Instead, she scolded her and rode away.
When Li Ping stopped her bicycle, she was surprised to find her new shoes missing. She hurried back and found the old woman there holding her shoes in her hands. She was sorry for what she had done and apologized to the woman.
From this, I learned everybody should be kind to each other. Never do as Li Pin did to the old, or you will feel greatly sorry.
**************************************************結束
4.假設你是李華，你的美國朋友Tom上個月來到北京學習。七月份你將去北京參加暑期中學生英語演講比賽，你在資料搜集、語言運用等方面遇到了困難。請根據以下要點給Tom寫一封電子郵件：
1.詢問Tom的生活和學習情況；
2.談談你的困難并請Tom幫忙；
3.告訴Tom你打算賽后去看他。
注意：1.詞數：120-150
2.可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
【參考范文】
4.Dear Tom,
How time flies! It has been a month since you came to Beijing. How is everything going on with your life and study now?
What excited me most is that I will go to Beijing to attend an English speech contest to be held in summer holiday in July for middle school students. But unfortunately, I’m encountering many difficulties in collecting materials needed and I also have problems in the application of the language. I wonder if you can help me with these difficulties. I really appreciate it if you could help me.
Here is good news for you. I’ve decided to go to see you after the English speech contest. I am looking forward to seeing you.
Best wishes to you and your parents!
Yours,
Li Hua
**********************************************************結束
8.下面圖表是對我省某校高三學生選擇高考志愿時所考慮因素的調查結果。請用英語寫一篇簡要的報告，并說說你自己的觀點。
注意：（1）文章的開頭已經寫好。
（2）詞數10左右。
（3）可以適當發揮。London and it 2______
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school 3____
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.4___ ___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you 5___
are particular interested in human rights.So I will 6____
see that there is anything on their website 7____
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport 8____
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he 9___
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look 10___
forward to seeing you again.
【參考答案】KEY 6
Dear Anish,
Here are the information about Manchester University.___is___
It is about 200 miles far away from London and it ___far___
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school__right__
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.___courses___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you __it__
are particular interested in human rights.So I will ___particularly__
see that there is anything on their website ___if/whether__
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport _to___
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he __arrive_
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look __and_
forward to seeing you again.
******************************************************結束
************************************************結束
謀篇的原則：
滿分作文都有個共性就是有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。文章的連貫性和緊湊感是很重要的。句子作為最小的表達意思的語言當位如果只是被隨意的整合，是無法達到有效表達的目的。
常見的句子之間的連接手段有： 使用代詞指代上一句中的名詞 重復使用上一句中的詞 使用連接詞 使用平行結構 高考大綱中常用的連接詞:
表并列補充關系的: what is more, besides, also, as well, moreover, furthermore, in addition, 表轉折對比關系的: but, however, yet, instead, on the other hand, on the contrary, although, different from, in contrast to, despite, in spite of, whereas, unlike, nevertheless, not only…but also, here…there, years ago…today, this…that, the former…the latter, then…now, the first…whereas the second, once…now, on the one hand…on the other hand, some…others, 表因果關系的: since, as, because (of), for, so, thus, therefore, as a result, so that, 表條件關系的: if, on the condition (that), as long as, unless, or else, 表時間關系的: when, after, before, until, as soon as, later, afterwards, soon, lately, recently, since, from then on, eventually, in the meantime, then, suddenly, at the same time, next, early this morning/year/century, after an interval, now, after, presently, later, afterward, somewhat later, finally, at last, all of a sudden, 表特定的順序關系: above all, first of all, firstly, first, secondly, the , next, finally, in the end, at last, 表換一種方式表達: in other words, that is to say, to put it another way, 表進行舉例說明: for instance, for example, like, such as, 表陳述事實: in fact, actually, as a matter of fact, to tell you the truth 表總結: on the whole, in short, all in all, general, in a word, in conclusion, in closing, in summary.
***********************************************************結束
【參考范文】
8.
Some senior middle school graduates have different opinions on how to choose their majors and universities.
About 35% of the students insist that the choice should be based on their own interest. They say interest is the way leading to success. They think it is a miserable thing to be forced to study what they have no interest in.
The percentage of the students who consider it is the need of the society that matters a lot, is 45%.They say think it will help them find the job they like best. In addition, interest can be developed and changed.
Interestingly, there are about 20% of the students who find it so difficult to make a choice that they prefer to follow the advice offered by their parents or teachers.
In my opinion, interest is the most important of all. Without interest you can’t study the subject very well and may have more difficulty with your career.
********************************************************結束
