寫作原文

　　In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the childrens development in the future.In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents. Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system . I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent . On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge childrens ability.

　　總體點評

　　本文立意正確，內容切題，結構完整,需注意以下問題：1、文章的立意雖然正確，且深入切題，但文章的內容不夠豐富充實，原因分析不夠深刻。第二段在分析造成現象的時候提出了三點考試決定孩子的未來考試是選拔人才的唯一標準教育制度很差考試為什么會決定孩子的未來，它怎樣決定了孩子的未來?為什么是選拔人才的唯一標準?教育制度很差，體現在什么方面?2、文章內容的銜接邏輯不是很清楚，如第二段先說考試決定未來后說考試是選拔人才的唯一標準，而實際上正因為在目前考試是選拔人才的唯一標準，所以考試在某種意義上決定了孩子的未來。3、文章依然存有少許漢式思維的句子，有的詞組搭配不合理，應在此方面加強。多模仿一些經典佳句。因此，建議作者以后在寫作之中不要提筆就寫，先列出一個大綱，把自己的思路理順，使自己的文章邏輯清晰，通順流暢。加油，祝你考研成功!!!

　　寫作原文

　　In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the childrens development in the future.In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents. Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system . I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent . On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge childrens ability.

　　總體點評

　　本文立意正確，內容切題，結構完整,需注意以下問題：1、文章的立意雖然正確，且深入切題，但文章的內容不夠豐富充實，原因分析不夠深刻。第二段在分析造成現象的時候提出了三點考試決定孩子的未來考試是選拔人才的唯一標準教育制度很差考試為什么會決定孩子的未來，它怎樣決定了孩子的未來?為什么是選拔人才的唯一標準?教育制度很差，體現在什么方面?2、文章內容的銜接邏輯不是很清楚，如第二段先說考試決定未來后說考試是選拔人才的唯一標準，而實際上正因為在目前考試是選拔人才的唯一標準，所以考試在某種意義上決定了孩子的未來。3、文章依然存有少許漢式思維的句子，有的詞組搭配不合理，應在此方面加強。多模仿一些經典佳句。因此，建議作者以后在寫作之中不要提筆就寫，先列出一個大綱，把自己的思路理順，使自己的文章邏輯清晰，通順流暢。加油，祝你考研成功!!!