I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英語作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，Madam)(加逗號(hào))

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(應(yīng)該用完成時(shí)，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，應(yīng)該是讀完才寫信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否則這不是一個(gè)完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(應(yīng)該用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼寫錯(cuò)誤professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(應(yīng)該用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前邊是one of結(jié)構(gòu)，這里應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一個(gè)) be unforgetable(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，unforgettable是令人難忘的，你不能說是我將令人難忘的) throught(拼寫錯(cuò)誤through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小寫) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款謂語右下角) 點(diǎn)評(píng)：4-5分主要問題是語法錯(cuò)誤和拼寫錯(cuò)誤比較多。需要多背單詞多積累詞語的用法，同時(shí)需要學(xué)習(xí)一下句式方面的語法知識(shí)。

　　I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英語作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，Madam)(加逗號(hào))

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(應(yīng)該用完成時(shí)，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，應(yīng)該是讀完才寫信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否則這不是一個(gè)完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(應(yīng)該用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼寫錯(cuò)誤professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(應(yīng)該用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前邊是one of結(jié)構(gòu)，這里應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一個(gè)) be unforgetable(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，unforgettable是令人難忘的，你不能說是我將令人難忘的) throught(拼寫錯(cuò)誤through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小寫) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款謂語右下角) 點(diǎn)評(píng)：4-5分主要問題是語法錯(cuò)誤和拼寫錯(cuò)誤比較多。需要多背單詞多積累詞語的用法，同時(shí)需要學(xué)習(xí)一下句式方面的語法知識(shí)。