我們?cè)鯓硬拍苁棺约旱淖魑脑诒姸辔恼轮忻摲f而出，獲得閱卷老師的青睞呢？

　　一、善于思考 勤于積累

　　要想在作文中拿到高分，這需要考生在日常生活中善于觀察，不能兩耳不聞窗外事，而應(yīng)積極關(guān)注當(dāng)今社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)，如人口問(wèn)題、污染問(wèn)題、世界和平等一系列現(xiàn)象；要善于思考，勤于把自己的思想用英語(yǔ)正確地表達(dá)和記錄下來(lái)，只有通過(guò)不斷的積累和磨練，才能練就良好的寫(xiě)作基本功。建議大家在考前把今年的相關(guān)重點(diǎn)問(wèn)題，熱點(diǎn)問(wèn)題回顧一下。積累一些相關(guān)詞匯，有備無(wú)患。

　　二、認(rèn)真審題 寫(xiě)好提綱

　　考生在拿到試卷之后，當(dāng)聽(tīng)力題做完，可以先看一看作文的題目與類(lèi)型，對(duì)它有一個(gè)大致的印象和準(zhǔn)備，在做語(yǔ)法和閱讀題時(shí)對(duì)自己的作文能有一個(gè)初步的構(gòu)思。應(yīng)盡可能地留出20分鐘的時(shí)間來(lái)寫(xiě)作文。在正式寫(xiě)作文時(shí)，可參照以下步驟：

　　1、認(rèn)真審題，確定題目中的關(guān)鍵詞。

　　2、展開(kāi)一次“Brain Storm”即頭腦風(fēng)暴，對(duì)該題引申出各種聯(lián)想和論點(diǎn)。

　　3、根據(jù)自己已有的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和詞匯量選擇自己最熟悉、最有把握的方面和論點(diǎn)來(lái)寫(xiě)作。

　　4、確定基本的寫(xiě)作時(shí)態(tài)，如記敘文通常用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。（時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用錯(cuò)誤是考生們大量失分的主要原因。）

　　5、對(duì)于有能力的同學(xué)，注意不能通篇均用簡(jiǎn)單句型，可適當(dāng)引入語(yǔ)法重點(diǎn)如狀語(yǔ)從句、賓語(yǔ)從句和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。這會(huì)使考生的作文有質(zhì)的提高。

　　6、當(dāng)整篇作文寫(xiě)完，一定要進(jìn)行仔細(xì)的檢查，注意使句子流暢，時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，單詞拼寫(xiě)正確，冠詞運(yùn)用正確，名詞的大小寫(xiě)正確。

　　下面，我們來(lái)針對(duì)作文題型和例文進(jìn)行評(píng)析。

　　作文題型分析與例文評(píng)析

　　命題作文即給出一個(gè)統(tǒng)一的題目，限定考生寫(xiě)作的具體范圍，要求考生就同一主題展開(kāi)敘述或評(píng)論。寫(xiě)好命題作文的關(guān)鍵是緊扣主題、立意明確、觀點(diǎn)清晰。

　　一、命題作文

　　［例1］To be a lovely Shanghainese

　　審題：該題的重點(diǎn)在于闡述作為一個(gè)可愛(ài)的上海人，我們關(guān)鍵應(yīng)怎樣做？在2003年的考生作文中，有一部分同學(xué)發(fā)生了嚴(yán)重的偏題，把描述重點(diǎn)放在形容上海是怎樣的一個(gè)大都市，因此失分很多。由此看來(lái)，審題的準(zhǔn)確是非常重要的。

　　學(xué)生作文：Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

　　教師評(píng)析：該篇作文行文流暢，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，以“first，Next，F(xiàn)inally”的結(jié)構(gòu)描述，層次感很強(qiáng)。不定式的恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用體現(xiàn)了考生較好的語(yǔ)法功底。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：9分

　　［例2］Six years' school life

　　審題：該題要求考生對(duì)學(xué)校生活進(jìn)行回顧和總結(jié)，適合以?shī)A敘夾議的方式來(lái)寫(xiě)作。（此外，從情感教育的角度來(lái)看，閱卷老師總希望讀到考生回憶自己美好、快樂(lè)的學(xué)校生活，而不是討厭自己的母校、老師、同學(xué)等消極情緒的體現(xiàn)。）

　　學(xué)生作文：I've been in my school forsix years.Six years' school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the pastsix years. I will never forget mysix years' school life.

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文非常明快、流暢，體現(xiàn)了考生對(duì)母校依依不舍的情懷。由于是對(duì)學(xué)校生活的回顧和總結(jié)，考生恰當(dāng)?shù)剡x擇以現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)作為主要的時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)強(qiáng)調(diào)影響和結(jié)果,文中"plays an important role"這一詞組和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的正確運(yùn)用也體現(xiàn)了考生良好的詞匯和語(yǔ)法功底。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

　　二、應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作

　　應(yīng)用文主要包括信函、電郵、日記、通知、廣告、電話等形式，它要求考生不僅能表達(dá)題中的主要內(nèi)容，還能夠正確地運(yùn)用各種文本格式進(jìn)行規(guī)范的書(shū)寫(xiě)，這也是考生對(duì)于英語(yǔ)傳統(tǒng)文化了解多少的反映。因此，考生應(yīng)在臨考前系統(tǒng)地復(fù)習(xí)各種文本格式以及打電話的規(guī)范用語(yǔ)，以做到處變不驚、百戰(zhàn)百勝。

　　［例3］寫(xiě)一封信給你在云南省西雙版納市的筆友李帆，告訴他你很愿意與他交朋友，并邀請(qǐng)他到上海來(lái)旅行。

　　審題：該題要求考生以規(guī)范的信件格式來(lái)書(shū)寫(xiě)，并把題中所出現(xiàn)的信息點(diǎn)都涵概在內(nèi)。建議考生可把題目中的信息點(diǎn)都一一劃出，以免發(fā)生遺漏。

　　學(xué)生作文：

Lifan

Xishuangbanna

Yunnan Province China

May25th,2004

Dear Lifan,

　　Thank you for your letter. I'm glad to be your pen-friend. We are the same years old, but we were born in different places. In my imagination, Xishuangbanna is a very beautiful place. There are a lot of plants and animals. You know I look forward to visiting Xishuangbanna. Would you like to come to Shanghai? I'd like to invite you to Shanghai in summer holiday. Shanghai is also a beautiful place. It is a modern city. There are a lot of interesting places such as the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the Bund, and Nanjing Road Walkway.

　　If you come here, I will show you around Shanghai. You can live at my home and my mother will cook you much delicious food. Let's be best friends!

Yours sincerely,

Xiaomin

　　教師擬評(píng)分：9分

　　［例4］寫(xiě)一篇題為“A Visit To_____”的日記。

　　審題：該題為半命題式作文。考生除了要注意運(yùn)用正確的日記格式，還可根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和熟悉程度來(lái)選擇、確定文章的主題.

　　學(xué)生作文：

May 25th, 2004 　　 sunny　

A Visit To Jinmao Building

　　Jinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today.

　　The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文主題明確，對(duì)于金茂大廈的描述也較具體，文中“the signal construction”一詞是全文的亮點(diǎn)。但整篇文章的層次不夠清晰，句子也以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，對(duì)于參觀這一動(dòng)詞的闡述還不夠充分。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：8分

　　三、看圖寫(xiě)話

　　看圖寫(xiě)話是英語(yǔ)作文常考的一種形式，但隨著牛津版教材的大量應(yīng)用，學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作能力有了較大的提高，因此作文的要求和難度也相應(yīng)提高。所以，在作文中繼續(xù)出現(xiàn)簡(jiǎn)單的敘事型看圖寫(xiě)話的可能性很小，但有可能會(huì)提供給考生一些具有寓意的漫畫(huà)或圖片，要求考生從中發(fā)現(xiàn)問(wèn)題、提出自己的觀點(diǎn)，這對(duì)考生的邏輯思維能力和英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言的嫻熟運(yùn)用都提出了更高的要求。

　　審題：這幅漫畫(huà)蘊(yùn)涵了一個(gè)深刻的主題即戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)與和平，這與當(dāng)今世界的熱點(diǎn)問(wèn)題密切相關(guān)，它不僅考核考生是否能流暢地表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，更需要考生站在人文關(guān)懷的高度來(lái)觀察整個(gè)世界。

　　學(xué)生作文：

A Represent of Freedom and Peace

　　Almost everyday we can see there are always a huge number of pigeons enjoying the sunbath in some large squares, but do you often care what a white pigeon stands for? That is peace. For hundreds of years, people always regard pigeons as a represent of freedom and peace. That is because of not only its lovely pure figure, but also its great passion to the outside world. Till now, I still can't help thinking of such a picture: In Iraq, a boy was watching a white pigeon over his head. The background was full of wounded solders and guns. Thus, this lovely white pigeon was contrastive to this iced background and gave people a deep consideration. Suddenly, athought comes into my mind: Why there have been so many wars in the world just for someone's own interest? Why can't people live like as mall pigeon with freedom? I hope there will not be wars, FOREVER!

　　教師評(píng)析：應(yīng)該說(shuō)，要把這篇看圖作文寫(xiě)好是有相當(dāng)難度的，但考生以非常流暢的筆調(diào)從鴿子聯(lián)想到自由與和平，再聯(lián)想到發(fā)生在伊拉克的戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)。文風(fēng)成熟老練，這在小學(xué)生的作文中是難能可貴的。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

　　［例6］審題：該圖要求考生先看懂漫畫(huà)，對(duì)它進(jìn)行清晰的描述，同時(shí)根據(jù)其隱藏的寓意提出自己的觀點(diǎn)，如在此圖中應(yīng)關(guān)注樹(shù)木被砍伐而提出環(huán)保的重要性。

　　學(xué)生作文：

　　Seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. But as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. He will ask: What are these? Are these trees? Of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. Actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. The covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. As we all know, trees are very important in our life. They can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. So I appeal: Don't cut down trees. Let' s make our earth greener for our later generation. Don't let the children think trees are only roots!

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，全文分三段，第一段詳細(xì)地描述漫畫(huà)的內(nèi)容；第二段闡述其蘊(yùn)涵的寓意即環(huán)保對(duì)于世界和后代們的重要性；第三段提出作者的號(hào)召，使文章的結(jié)尾明快、有力！

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

　　祝大家在今年的中考中取得好成績(jī)。同時(shí)，希望大家關(guān)注我們網(wǎng)站的其它內(nèi)容。相信一定會(huì)幫助您在學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的路上更進(jìn)一步。

　　我們?cè)鯓硬拍苁棺约旱淖魑脑诒姸辔恼轮忻摲f而出，獲得閱卷老師的青睞呢？

　　一、善于思考 勤于積累

　　要想在作文中拿到高分，這需要考生在日常生活中善于觀察，不能兩耳不聞窗外事，而應(yīng)積極關(guān)注當(dāng)今社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)，如人口問(wèn)題、污染問(wèn)題、世界和平等一系列現(xiàn)象；要善于思考，勤于把自己的思想用英語(yǔ)正確地表達(dá)和記錄下來(lái)，只有通過(guò)不斷的積累和磨練，才能練就良好的寫(xiě)作基本功。建議大家在考前把今年的相關(guān)重點(diǎn)問(wèn)題，熱點(diǎn)問(wèn)題回顧一下。積累一些相關(guān)詞匯，有備無(wú)患。

　　二、認(rèn)真審題 寫(xiě)好提綱

　　考生在拿到試卷之后，當(dāng)聽(tīng)力題做完，可以先看一看作文的題目與類(lèi)型，對(duì)它有一個(gè)大致的印象和準(zhǔn)備，在做語(yǔ)法和閱讀題時(shí)對(duì)自己的作文能有一個(gè)初步的構(gòu)思。應(yīng)盡可能地留出20分鐘的時(shí)間來(lái)寫(xiě)作文。在正式寫(xiě)作文時(shí)，可參照以下步驟：

　　1、認(rèn)真審題，確定題目中的關(guān)鍵詞。

　　2、展開(kāi)一次“Brain Storm”即頭腦風(fēng)暴，對(duì)該題引申出各種聯(lián)想和論點(diǎn)。

　　3、根據(jù)自己已有的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和詞匯量選擇自己最熟悉、最有把握的方面和論點(diǎn)來(lái)寫(xiě)作。

　　4、確定基本的寫(xiě)作時(shí)態(tài)，如記敘文通常用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。（時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用錯(cuò)誤是考生們大量失分的主要原因。）

　　5、對(duì)于有能力的同學(xué)，注意不能通篇均用簡(jiǎn)單句型，可適當(dāng)引入語(yǔ)法重點(diǎn)如狀語(yǔ)從句、賓語(yǔ)從句和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。這會(huì)使考生的作文有質(zhì)的提高。

　　6、當(dāng)整篇作文寫(xiě)完，一定要進(jìn)行仔細(xì)的檢查，注意使句子流暢，時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，單詞拼寫(xiě)正確，冠詞運(yùn)用正確，名詞的大小寫(xiě)正確。

　　下面，我們來(lái)針對(duì)作文題型和例文進(jìn)行評(píng)析。

　　作文題型分析與例文評(píng)析

　　命題作文即給出一個(gè)統(tǒng)一的題目，限定考生寫(xiě)作的具體范圍，要求考生就同一主題展開(kāi)敘述或評(píng)論。寫(xiě)好命題作文的關(guān)鍵是緊扣主題、立意明確、觀點(diǎn)清晰。

　　一、命題作文

　　［例1］To be a lovely Shanghainese

　　審題：該題的重點(diǎn)在于闡述作為一個(gè)可愛(ài)的上海人，我們關(guān)鍵應(yīng)怎樣做？在2003年的考生作文中，有一部分同學(xué)發(fā)生了嚴(yán)重的偏題，把描述重點(diǎn)放在形容上海是怎樣的一個(gè)大都市，因此失分很多。由此看來(lái)，審題的準(zhǔn)確是非常重要的。

　　學(xué)生作文：Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

　　教師評(píng)析：該篇作文行文流暢，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，以“first，Next，F(xiàn)inally”的結(jié)構(gòu)描述，層次感很強(qiáng)。不定式的恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用體現(xiàn)了考生較好的語(yǔ)法功底。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：9分

　　［例2］Six years' school life

　　審題：該題要求考生對(duì)學(xué)校生活進(jìn)行回顧和總結(jié)，適合以?shī)A敘夾議的方式來(lái)寫(xiě)作。（此外，從情感教育的角度來(lái)看，閱卷老師總希望讀到考生回憶自己美好、快樂(lè)的學(xué)校生活，而不是討厭自己的母校、老師、同學(xué)等消極情緒的體現(xiàn)。）

　　學(xué)生作文：I've been in my school forsix years.Six years' school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the pastsix years. I will never forget mysix years' school life.

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文非常明快、流暢，體現(xiàn)了考生對(duì)母校依依不舍的情懷。由于是對(duì)學(xué)校生活的回顧和總結(jié)，考生恰當(dāng)?shù)剡x擇以現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)作為主要的時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)強(qiáng)調(diào)影響和結(jié)果,文中"plays an important role"這一詞組和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的正確運(yùn)用也體現(xiàn)了考生良好的詞匯和語(yǔ)法功底。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

　　二、應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作

　　應(yīng)用文主要包括信函、電郵、日記、通知、廣告、電話等形式，它要求考生不僅能表達(dá)題中的主要內(nèi)容，還能夠正確地運(yùn)用各種文本格式進(jìn)行規(guī)范的書(shū)寫(xiě)，這也是考生對(duì)于英語(yǔ)傳統(tǒng)文化了解多少的反映。因此，考生應(yīng)在臨考前系統(tǒng)地復(fù)習(xí)各種文本格式以及打電話的規(guī)范用語(yǔ)，以做到處變不驚、百戰(zhàn)百勝。

　　［例3］寫(xiě)一封信給你在云南省西雙版納市的筆友李帆，告訴他你很愿意與他交朋友，并邀請(qǐng)他到上海來(lái)旅行。

　　審題：該題要求考生以規(guī)范的信件格式來(lái)書(shū)寫(xiě)，并把題中所出現(xiàn)的信息點(diǎn)都涵概在內(nèi)。建議考生可把題目中的信息點(diǎn)都一一劃出，以免發(fā)生遺漏。

　　學(xué)生作文：

Lifan

Xishuangbanna

Yunnan Province China

May25th,2004

Dear Lifan,

　　Thank you for your letter. I'm glad to be your pen-friend. We are the same years old, but we were born in different places. In my imagination, Xishuangbanna is a very beautiful place. There are a lot of plants and animals. You know I look forward to visiting Xishuangbanna. Would you like to come to Shanghai? I'd like to invite you to Shanghai in summer holiday. Shanghai is also a beautiful place. It is a modern city. There are a lot of interesting places such as the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the Bund, and Nanjing Road Walkway.

　　If you come here, I will show you around Shanghai. You can live at my home and my mother will cook you much delicious food. Let's be best friends!

Yours sincerely,

Xiaomin

　　教師擬評(píng)分：9分

　　［例4］寫(xiě)一篇題為“A Visit To_____”的日記。

　　審題：該題為半命題式作文。考生除了要注意運(yùn)用正確的日記格式，還可根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和熟悉程度來(lái)選擇、確定文章的主題.

　　學(xué)生作文：

May 25th, 2004 　　 sunny　

A Visit To Jinmao Building

　　Jinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today.

　　The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文主題明確，對(duì)于金茂大廈的描述也較具體，文中“the signal construction”一詞是全文的亮點(diǎn)。但整篇文章的層次不夠清晰，句子也以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，對(duì)于參觀這一動(dòng)詞的闡述還不夠充分。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：8分

　　三、看圖寫(xiě)話

　　看圖寫(xiě)話是英語(yǔ)作文常考的一種形式，但隨著牛津版教材的大量應(yīng)用，學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作能力有了較大的提高，因此作文的要求和難度也相應(yīng)提高。所以，在作文中繼續(xù)出現(xiàn)簡(jiǎn)單的敘事型看圖寫(xiě)話的可能性很小，但有可能會(huì)提供給考生一些具有寓意的漫畫(huà)或圖片，要求考生從中發(fā)現(xiàn)問(wèn)題、提出自己的觀點(diǎn)，這對(duì)考生的邏輯思維能力和英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言的嫻熟運(yùn)用都提出了更高的要求。

　　審題：這幅漫畫(huà)蘊(yùn)涵了一個(gè)深刻的主題即戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)與和平，這與當(dāng)今世界的熱點(diǎn)問(wèn)題密切相關(guān)，它不僅考核考生是否能流暢地表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，更需要考生站在人文關(guān)懷的高度來(lái)觀察整個(gè)世界。

　　學(xué)生作文：

A Represent of Freedom and Peace

　　Almost everyday we can see there are always a huge number of pigeons enjoying the sunbath in some large squares, but do you often care what a white pigeon stands for? That is peace. For hundreds of years, people always regard pigeons as a represent of freedom and peace. That is because of not only its lovely pure figure, but also its great passion to the outside world. Till now, I still can't help thinking of such a picture: In Iraq, a boy was watching a white pigeon over his head. The background was full of wounded solders and guns. Thus, this lovely white pigeon was contrastive to this iced background and gave people a deep consideration. Suddenly, athought comes into my mind: Why there have been so many wars in the world just for someone's own interest? Why can't people live like as mall pigeon with freedom? I hope there will not be wars, FOREVER!

　　教師評(píng)析：應(yīng)該說(shuō)，要把這篇看圖作文寫(xiě)好是有相當(dāng)難度的，但考生以非常流暢的筆調(diào)從鴿子聯(lián)想到自由與和平，再聯(lián)想到發(fā)生在伊拉克的戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)。文風(fēng)成熟老練，這在小學(xué)生的作文中是難能可貴的。

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

　　［例6］審題：該圖要求考生先看懂漫畫(huà)，對(duì)它進(jìn)行清晰的描述，同時(shí)根據(jù)其隱藏的寓意提出自己的觀點(diǎn)，如在此圖中應(yīng)關(guān)注樹(shù)木被砍伐而提出環(huán)保的重要性。

　　學(xué)生作文：

　　Seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. But as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. He will ask: What are these? Are these trees? Of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. Actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. The covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. As we all know, trees are very important in our life. They can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. So I appeal: Don't cut down trees. Let' s make our earth greener for our later generation. Don't let the children think trees are only roots!

　　教師評(píng)析：整篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，全文分三段，第一段詳細(xì)地描述漫畫(huà)的內(nèi)容；第二段闡述其蘊(yùn)涵的寓意即環(huán)保對(duì)于世界和后代們的重要性；第三段提出作者的號(hào)召，使文章的結(jié)尾明快、有力！

　　教師擬評(píng)分：10分

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